This is the first draft of the first Opinion Editorial essay that I’ve ever written! In this essay I didn’t have much issues with formatting my essay the way that I should have for the desired website in which I decided I would pitch my Op-Ed to. However, I did instead of directly stating my argument in the beginning of my essay, I gave examples way before I even decided to state what my argument was in the first place. Moving forward, another one of the mistakes that I made in my essay was that I ended up contradicting my main argument by introducing a new one. My argument in simple terms was that college should be free. However, I stated within the end that perhaps college couldn’t be free and then proceeded to give alternative solutions aside from how college can be made free.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tHn8eEZYz4kgAFRkyJvlAWl-ypg5f_19UKWmBbtnHrc/edit?usp=sharing
The link above represents my final edited draft of my Opinion Editorial Essay. To improve my writing I introduced my argument in the very first paragraph of my essay to kind of guide the readers and help them understand what I’m talking about. Additionally, to fix the issue about introducing an entirely new argument I reworded my paragraph. I came to the conclusion that my main point wasn’t delivered because of the wording. Instead of mentioning that perhaps college can not be made tuition free, I mentioned how it would not be easy but while it happens there are some things that can occur to make tuition more bearable for students.
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